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Some companies sponsor sports to advertise themselves. Some people say it is good while others think there are disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is often seen that numerous well-known businesses choose
sport
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 teams as a means of advertising their brands and would spend a great deal of
money
 in
this
 way.
Although
 some people are against
this
 action, it is favoured by many.
This
 essay would discuss both sides of the argument and mention the two main reasons why its benefits outweigh its disadvantages. On the one hand,
this
 action is opposed by a percentage of
the
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society. Currently, they argue, there is a growing number of low-quality products being presented to consumers using sports.
This
 increasing number would mean a growing population of unsatisfied customers who were convinced to buy the products just
beacuse
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because
 their lovely teams were advertising them but later, proved to be a waste of
money
.
Thus
, the chances are there would be tensions among consumers, companies and
sport
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 teams.
On the other hand
, it is strongly supported by the rest of
the
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society for two leading reasons.
Firstly
, it could be economical for businesses. Generally, the advertisement fee in sports would be considerably cheaper compared to the same fee in mainstream media
such
 as TV. Clearly, by paying less amount of
money
 in
this
 regard, they would afford more ads and
therefore
, their sales would be sharply increased which in the end, would be a contributing factor for boosting the economy.
Furthermore
, it would be a great help for teams in terms of revenue. Take football as an example. Broadly speaking, apart
form
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 two or three wealthy teams, the rest are struggling with financial problems which would make them unable to hire professional players.
Therefore
, they would not achieve acceptable results and fail to live up to their fans' expectations. Given the
money
 that companies are ready and willing to pay, most of them would be presumably able to
to
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employ new and talented players who would positively affect the teams'
perfomances
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performances
. All in all,
sport
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 teams would be a great option when it comes to advertising brands and products and the way I see it, is that its advantages should be considered more crucial than its
negetive
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negative
 points.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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