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ADVANCES İN TECHNOLOGY HAVE MEANT THAT THEY İNCREASİNGLY USE MACHİNES TO DO JOBS THAT PREVİOSLY DONE BY HUMANS.THE BENEFİTS FAR OUTWEİGH THE DİSADVANTAGES.TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DİSAGREE.

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We are living in a world that technological advancements have a great
impat
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impact
 on society.
Accordingly
, machines have been displaced by human force in some
work places
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.
However
,it is believed that the advantages of
technology
 exceed the disadvantages and I will outline my point of view in
this
 essay. Thanks to cutting-edge
technology
 life
becomes
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more
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easier than the past.It is obvious that technological products enhance the quality of human lives.To illustrate, we can easily access to the information by using our
smart phones
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smartphones
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 in a
second
.
Besides
, medical
practioners
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practitioners
 are able to save many lives with the help of technological devices which are used for examination in
m
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edical
field
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such
 as MRI and
ultrason
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ultrasound
.
On the other hand
, some
skeptics
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 argue that technological advancements are not
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beneficial as people think.As using machines will leave people unemployed and people will suffer
its
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 consequences to a large extent.
However
, it is certain that improvements in
technology
 result in different kind of new recruitments
such
 as
machine
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 engineering or computer engineering.
Besides
,employers who increase their profits by means all machines probably invest their output
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other fields which provide different opportunities to the people. In conclusion, people are still not sure about the effects of
technology
 if it is
benefical
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beneficial
 or not.
However
, I reach a point that
technology
 has become
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ntegral part of our lives and humankind has become more practical and confident about life despite its negative
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