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Some people think that competitive sports have a positive effect on the child’s education while others argue it is not so. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and opine

#people #sports #effect #child’s #education #opine
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 of magazines that people were buying in 5
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 of magazines sold is provided for 2025. Overall, The
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 of
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magazines
 sold among the countries were different and in 2025,
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 is expected to decrease in all the countries, except in Spain. In 2005, France was the country that sold more
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magazines
 at 40.000.
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, in 2015,
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 decreased slightly and remained just at 38,000 approximately. In the US, from 2005 and 2015, there were more magazines sold, but in the future
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 is expected to be at 25,000.
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 magazines in the future and by 2025 over 15.000 magazines are predicted to be sold.
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 the magazine sold in Italy rose from 2005 and 2015 about 5,000,
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 will fall significantly in 2025 and only 1,000 will be sold.
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agazine sold at 5000.
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 is expected to be the same in 2025
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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