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These days,too many people maintain their health by relying on doctors and medicine, rather than by following a healthy lifestyle Do you agree or disagree

Over the past few decades, there has been a significant
delevelopment
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development
 in the
lifestyle
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 of ordinary people.
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, many inhabitants keep themselves fit, depending wholly on a
phsycian
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physician
instead
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 of
embracigng
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embracing
 a fit
lifestyle
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.
Although
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this
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 may be a
prevalant
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prevalent
 conviction among some people, I strongly opine
thaat
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that
 adopting a healthy
lifestyle
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 can make them happier.
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 with, dwellers can adopt
myraid
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myriad
 ways to make them healthier rather than going to a practitioner. The easiest way to do
that is
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f
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ollow a healthy
diet
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.
This
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 is because dietary food consists of a plethora of nutritional value essential for the nourishment of
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b
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ody.
Moreever
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Moreover
, with nutritious food, if they consume
c
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onsiderable amount of water, it can bring instrumental changes in their
body
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.
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, a recent study in the Oxford university suggested that people following a stringent
diet
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 tend to stay fitter compared to their
counter parts
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.
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 it is imminent to follow a
healthly
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healthy
diet
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 to restrict the attack of diseases in our
body
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.
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, another apt way to
life
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 a healthy
lifestyle
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 over visiting a doctor is regular workout and yoga.
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 not only helps in building a fit
body
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,
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 but
also
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 helps in shaping a sound mind by relaxation from daily stress, eventually
amiliorating
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ameliorating
 the overall well -being of people.
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, a recent study
conduced
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conducted
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 in the University of Combodia says that people who exercise regularly are less likely to attract diseases. In conclusion, even though people are dependent on the practitioner to get a healthy
lifestyle
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, I believe the individual can themselves achieve a healthier life by changing their
diet
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 as well as regular exercise.

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