You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

To what extent do I agree or disagree about free
health
well being provided in the country? Everyone should have a right for medical
care
. Why?
Firstly
, we came to
this
world to be cared about.
Secondly
, all basic treatments should be provided free of charge,
for example
, regular annual check-ups like a blood test, fundamental dental
care
, vision
care
, mental
care
and physical check-ups like treatment from chiropractic clinic. The reason why I do agree with free
health
care
,
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because those all
care
visits mentioned early could have helped to eliminate consequences later.
For example
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untreated mental well being can lead to addictions, violence, crime. Not taking
care
of your physical
health
can lead to posture deformation and become disabled eventually. But
also
I do agree despite we would take the best
care
and regular check-ups, there would have happened still those
health
problems. Or sudden accidents, which we cannot manage to stop. At that moment people wish that all treatments would be for free, because those individuals may not work and earn money due to
health
condition
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Nowadays we have so many options to choose from how to be treated. Some prefer to pay privately and visit a naturopath and some people only believe that western medicine could heal them. So I think depends what kind of the treatment the particular person needs, many people are already born with needs for rest of their life, some happen during the living unpredictably and some we cause to ourselves. Right now, I cannot come up with the disagreement, but we need to take
care
at our best that later a treatment will cost us the least
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if the country does not provide free
health
care
or we do not have money.
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