As global trade increases, many goods, including those we use on a daily basis, are produced in other countries and have to be transported long distances. Do the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

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With the passage of time,
as a result
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of the increase on the global
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of goods, some countries have decided to make essential products on other countries, which means that they will need to travel long distances before arriving at their destinations. Despite
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strategy had some positive effects on the global economy,
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essay will argue that in overall it has more drawbacks.
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, making goods in other countries results in fewer
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opportunities for local people. As manufactures companies are located in other countries, which causes hundreds of manual labours jobs are lost. An example of
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can be seen when Ford moved its manufacture company to China, which resulted in leaving one million people who work there without a job.
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, in the case of a pandemic
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if goods can not be transported to the country of destination, there will be a lack of product needed to cover the
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some companies would still operate and try to deliver the products, some international borders could be close and the goods might not be able to be transported.
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, when the Covid-19 was at its peak, Target was not able to export day to day goods
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as pens and toys. Despite
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, one positive aspect of making products in other countries is that companies can make more goods with less money.
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happens as the manual
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is cheaper, so companies can employ more manual
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workers, and
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increase the goods’ production.
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, Kmart states that with the money that they would spend in manual
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on Australia, in China they can employ the double of workers. In conclusion, as the
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for goods is higher than before, companies have had to produce their goods in other countries.
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,
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has contributed to companies been able to produce more goods at
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cost.
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, I consider that it has more negative effects on people, as it could result in people losing their jobs and in the case of a pandemic the
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not be able to be covered.
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