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Labour-saving devices such as dishwashers and communication tools such as computers are supposed to make our lives easier. However, some people argue that these devices only make them more difficult. Does modern technology reduce or increase stress? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people think that modern innovations that are developed to make our lives easier make it hard
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if people want to communicate each other, they would have to spend a lot of time in writing the letters, go to a nearby post office to drop them by spending some money and wait for about a week or two for the other person to read it and reply back. Nowadays it is very easy with the help of modern discoveries like the internet, one has to type the message or make a phone call or even a video chat and the person on
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, I can call my friend who is 1000kms away and ask him how he is in a matter of
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, household items
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 without even touching it which helps me keep the place tidy and sanitized
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 take some labour off so that we can focus on what is important. In conclusion, I may say that these devices, tools and techniques play a major role in reducing the efforts that a human being is required to do and keep them happy throughout the day and make use of the time which can be spent something meaningful.
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