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In some countries, people are no longer allowed to smoke in many public places and office buildings. Do you think this is a good rule or a bad rule?

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In the modern world, smoking is extremely popular.
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, few countries have restricted smoking in general areas and inside offices. I am certain that it is beneficial and I will explain why throughout
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 essay.
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, by having laws in place, people have limited freedom to
smoke
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 in common areas or inside buildings which can help other people in the
community
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.
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, smoking is a personal choice and it should not affect others. If a person smokes around other individuals who don't
smoke
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, those individuals can get really uncomfortable.
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, a popular bus station in Melbourne was once filled with individuals who
smoke
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 and daily commuters were badly impacted by that. Recently, the council imposed a rule preventing smoking and now it is a much better place.
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, having a set of rules for smoking can help the rights of the
community
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 who don't
smoke
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.
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, establishing laws to prevent public smoking can help to reduce the negative
health
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 impact of innocent people. Science has proved that many
health
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 issues arising due to
smoke
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 are impacting the
community
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 who were surrounded by a smoking person.
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 is really unacceptable as the victim of smoking is an innocent citizen.
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, a study done in Europe has found out that 80% of the
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 who have lung cancers were non-smokers and they all have at least one friend who smokes.
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, by having regulations to limit smoking in common areas can increase the good
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 of citizens. To sum up, creating laws to limit persons from smoking in common areas can protect not only the rights but
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 can increase the
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 of the other members of society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • passive smoking
  • respiratory issues
  • health conditions
  • cigarette butts
  • littering
  • promote a healthier lifestyle
  • smoking rates
  • workplace productivity
  • absenteeism
  • smoke-free environment
  • rights of non-smokers
  • inclusive
  • personal freedom
  • governmental overreach
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