Some people think poverty is the reason behind most crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays as the world population is increasing, poverty is developing more and more. Some
people
argue that the shortage is the reason behind most crimes. I partially agree with this
statement for several reasons.
Firstly
, poverty is one of the major problems in these years. It's noticeable how poor people
that
live in urban or suburban areas don't have enough space to farm or hunt, Correct pronoun usage
who
thus
they are more propensity to commit a crime to survive compared to poor people
that
live in rural areas and could rely on farming or breeding. To cite an example, recent studies suggest that the percentage of total crimes committed was composed Correct pronoun usage
who
by
50% of poor Change preposition
of
people
that
live in the cities, Correct pronoun usage
who
whereas
this
percentage drop
to Wrong verb form
dropped
a
nearly 15% for Correct article usage
apply
people
that
live in the rural areas.
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who
Moreover
, poverty could be a way to do more and could incentivise people
to reach better results as they want to escape this
situation. Furthermore
, it can enhance the relationship
among different Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
people
as they will be normally dependent among
each other. One clear example could be the "Giustiniana" community, founded in 1980 by Change preposition
on
people
that
were in Correct pronoun usage
who
economical
difficulties and based on a common sharing of possession among the members, Replace the word
economic
that is
still operating.
To draw the
conclusions, in certain Correct article usage
apply
cases
scarcity could be the reason behind most crimes, Add a comma
cases,
Although
, on the other hands
,it's noticeable how it can push Fix the agreement mistake
hand
people
to improve their selves by reaching higher goals. Governments should take severe measures in order to tackle this
problem and allow everyone to have a better lifestyle.Submitted by Niccolò on
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