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The graph compares a European country's weekly consumption of fish, lamb, beef and chicken in grams per person from 1979 to 2004. Overall, the chicken consumed per person showed a positive trend, whereas the other three items average consumption declined over the years. it is evident that beef was the most preferred meal on the plate in 1979 with about 220 grams of weekly eating, which by 2004 fell dramatically by almost 50 per cent.
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 dropped down from about 150 grams in 1979 to around 50 grams in 2004.
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 most popular meat on the plate, ie chicken in 1979 rose with some fluctuations overtook beek in 1989 and by the
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 15 years, the consumers doubled the quantity of beating to reach approx 250grams of weekly diet per person.
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