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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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well connected
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 place. With fast travelling options
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food
 and other products are routinely shipped all over the
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people
 belief consuming local products is cheap and has less impact on
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nvironment.
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different
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orld. One country
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 with metals and the other has plenty of oil reserves. some places are ideal to grow vegetables and fruits and the others can not bear any.
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some parts of
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orld are suitable for one
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, which can not grow in other places.
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nited Arab Emirates has huge oil reserves and provide the
world
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vegetables
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AE does not import fruits and vegetables from other countries, it's people will not be able to enjoy good
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SA and it can not be grown in many warm countries. so these countries have to import
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ew disadvantages as well. imported
food
 is always expenses due to shipping cost and import charges. It
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mpact on
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nvironment due to
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onsumption of fuel to ship it from one place to
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. Oil spillage in seas is
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 an issue and fatal for sea populations.
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it will consume
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uge amount of fuel to ship from
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 and it will be costly and has higher carbon
foot print
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. we should try to use local produce as much as possible and ship
food
 which is vital or not readily available.
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, countries need to manage their imports from their close neighbours. In my opinion
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enefits of
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shipping
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outweighs
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the disadvantages but countries should closely monitor their imports and
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 it to reduce the impact on
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nvironment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • transportation
  • environmentally friendly
  • economically beneficial
  • local farmers
  • local economy
  • fresher
  • nutritious
  • food security
  • imports
  • preserving
  • traditional farming practices
  • biodiversity
  • limited variety
  • availability
  • cost
  • contributor
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