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It's obvious that Brazil and Egypt international
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 arrival rates are the lowest ones in
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SA are the highest in
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 graph. Brazil and Egypt's percents of international
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 arrivals started with the lowest rate which was roughly 7% and increased with the straight line from 1995 to 2010 and reached approximately 12 and 17 respectively. Rates of Malaysia's international
tourist
 arrivals started to increase gradually with 20% and reached
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eak with 40% from 1995 to 2010. France's percents of international
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 30% so
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 sharply and reached it's
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ighest level with roughly 85% from 1995 to 2010 and it's the highest increase in
this
 graph. Percents of USA's international
tourist
 arrivals started to increase with 70% in 1995 and
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 gradually to 2010 and reached it's apex
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approximately
 85% which is the same
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 France's highest point.
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