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Some people are of the opinion that women should play an equal role in police or military forces like the army. Others believe that this work is unsuitable for women. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
it is irrefutable that, women play a crucial role everywhere in
this
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 modern era like as men .a certain segment of society believe that ,Police military and army forces these type of jobs are not fit for females I will delve both points in the upcoming paragraphs.
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To begin
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a vital role is played by women in the society of every Nation without ladies
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 cannot make their family complete .because, men have to go for their jobs they never stay with their families everyday women always look after the family
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 as ,provide care to the children and oldest person of
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amily. not only
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, they have to pay attention to children study ,behave ,eating, clothes and other household work. in
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 contemporary Era, females have the same right
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man
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ob. ladies can join the police, military and other business and they can make their different identity and
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 get name and fame universally
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 everyone will give respect to them.
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on the other hand
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some people find that Police military army jobs are not suitable for girls because these kinds of jobs
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 concentration, energy physical strength without these things no one can, do these jobs well.women are working with men in factories .
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, they cannot perform well in
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 jobs .owing to ,week physical power as compared to
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, during the war military ,army force men have to face dangerous situations and
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 lift those soldiers they get injured if women go there they cannot do it . it will be difficult for them.
Conclusion
in conclusion ,
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, it is considered women are physically weak than men. but, they can improve their physical power and muscular strength with the help of hard work and practice . it is well said that practice makes
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an perfect. I believe that women should make decisions for self never think about others thinking.

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