We live in a world of technology these days. While the internet brings with it clear advantages, the problems in term of control and security of information outweighs the advantages. To what extent do you agree?

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We are leaving in the world of technology, which is a wonderful place. It is growing in leaps and bounds. The topic in which, I shall be discussing

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its utilities and

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. To start with

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ositive side of the coin, There is so much work have been simplified by the computer age. Knowledge has helped us to grow and develop. It has made our life simpler and easy. Forinsatnace, If we need to know someone address, it's just a click away. Earlier getting someone basic stuff was

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a lot more hassle

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to be. Human's have developed machinery to help themselves

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so that they can develop in multiple ways.

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nobody would have thought about reaching to moon and stars. It was just a miracle for the people.

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, now the scenario is completely is different. People know the fact and

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oung generation is more interested to explore things.

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there are advantages, It

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carries its own sets of disadvantages. Applied science has certain limitation. which is bizarre to accept that any problem cannot be handle with mankind. As an illustration, the muddle created with the internet

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as security bridge and leaking of valuable date, It the major concern.

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lternative solution

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available to solve it, like increasing the screening time and more one-time password concepts etc's. The most recent incident of

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imilar situation

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had happed

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ouple of months

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ago, Due to incompetence of few programs. Some of

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uge chunk was debited from a personal account. But due to few experts, it was credited again. So, I do not agree with the sentence mentioned and I believe, we should not glorify our darkness rather we should count our blessing.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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We live in a world of technology these days. While the internet brings with it clear advantages, the problems in term of control and security of information outweighs the advantages. To what extent do you agree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Today more and more people are using computers and electronic devices to access information. Thus, there is no need to print newspapers, books, or magazines anymore. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some areas of US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are companied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

Topic: Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion

Some people say that the experiences a child has before starting school have the most influence on their future life. Others say that experiences as a teenager, especially at school, are more influential. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.