We live in a world of technology these days. While the internet brings with it clear advantages, the problems in term of control and security of information outweighs the advantages. To what extent do you agree?

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We are leaving in the world of technology, which is a wonderful place. It is growing in leaps and bounds. The topic in which, I shall be discussing

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its utilities and

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ositive side of the coin, There is so much work have been simplified by the computer age. Knowledge has helped us to grow and develop. It has made our life simpler and easy. Forinsatnace, If we need to know someone address, it's just a click away. Earlier getting someone basic stuff was

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a lot more hassle

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to be. Human's have developed machinery to help themselves

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so that they can develop in multiple ways.

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nobody would have thought about reaching to moon and stars. It was just a miracle for the people.

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, now the scenario is completely is different. People know the fact and

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oung generation is more interested to explore things.

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there are advantages, It

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carries its own sets of disadvantages. Applied science has certain limitation. which is bizarre to accept that any problem cannot be handle with mankind. As an illustration, the muddle created with the internet

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as security bridge and leaking of valuable date, It the major concern.

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lternative solution

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available to solve it, like increasing the screening time and more one-time password concepts etc's. The most recent incident of

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imilar situation

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had happed

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ouple of months

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ago, Due to incompetence of few programs. Some of

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uge chunk was debited from a personal account. But due to few experts, it was credited again. So, I do not agree with the sentence mentioned and I believe, we should not glorify our darkness rather we should count our blessing.

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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Relevant & specific examples

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We live in a world of technology these days. While the internet brings with it clear advantages, the problems in term of control and security of information outweighs the advantages. To what extent do you agree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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In the past, movies were produced by big companies, but today people can make movies. Is this a negative or positive development?

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