We live in a world of technology these days. While the internet brings with it clear advantages, the problems in term of control and security of information outweighs the advantages. To what extent do you agree?

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We are leaving in the world of technology, which is a wonderful place. It is growing in leaps and bounds. The topic in which, I shall be discussing

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its utilities and

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ositive side of the coin, There is so much work have been simplified by the computer age. Knowledge has helped us to grow and develop. It has made our life simpler and easy. Forinsatnace, If we need to know someone address, it's just a click away. Earlier getting someone basic stuff was

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a lot more hassle

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to be. Human's have developed machinery to help themselves

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so that they can develop in multiple ways.

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nobody would have thought about reaching to moon and stars. It was just a miracle for the people.

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, now the scenario is completely is different. People know the fact and

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oung generation is more interested to explore things.

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there are advantages, It

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carries its own sets of disadvantages. Applied science has certain limitation. which is bizarre to accept that any problem cannot be handle with mankind. As an illustration, the muddle created with the internet

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as security bridge and leaking of valuable date, It the major concern.

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lternative solution

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available to solve it, like increasing the screening time and more one-time password concepts etc's. The most recent incident of

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imilar situation

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ouple of months

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ago, Due to incompetence of few programs. Some of

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uge chunk was debited from a personal account. But due to few experts, it was credited again. So, I do not agree with the sentence mentioned and I believe, we should not glorify our darkness rather we should count our blessing.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

295 words

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We live in a world of technology these days. While the internet brings with it clear advantages, the problems in term of control and security of information outweighs the advantages. To what extent do you agree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

If financially possible, is it always better for young people to leave home and be independent at the age of 18, do you agree or disagree?

Some think that it is more important for children to engage in outdoor activities instead of playing videogames. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

Older generation often hold some traditional ideas on the correct way of life, thoughts and behavior. Most people argue that it is not helpful for younger generations to prepare for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?