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Nowadays, child labor has become a major concern. why it is so? What can be done to solve this problem?

It is important that actions are taken to combat these problems. In order to solve
this
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 problem
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it’s necessary
first
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 that family nurture them to an interest in their studies and support them
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 provides them with psychological comfort and security because the main factor in the prosperity of children is the surrounding environment
as well as all they need
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 is peace and safety. Another answer to
this
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 pressing issue is to avoid falling into these crises, the law must prevent children from working and if they violate the system, will require them to pay fines. In conclusion, children are a new generation for
the
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 better future. Raising, taking care of and stimulating them is the biggest motivation to reach successful life and effective businesses.
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, child
labor
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labour
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are
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is
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 a victim of
the
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society.
In addition
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, we should pay attention to the prevalence of
this
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 problem.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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