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Some believe that people should make efforts to fight climate change while others think it is better to learn to live with it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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There is no doubt that
climate
change
 is becoming a severe problem around the world. Some people suggest we should struggle with
climate
change
,
whereas
 others assert that we should learn to live with it, rather than fight.
This
 essay will explain both opinions and why I support the former's idea.
To begin
 with the on hand, some people believe that learning how to live with
climate
change
 is a better option.
For example
, there are lots of useful sources on the Internet to deal with a quite hot temperature in summer.
According to
 an article by Nikkei newspaper, a black curtain is clearly a useful item to protect from severe sunlight, which can reduce interior temperature to 2 degrees Celsius. If people gain beneficial information and conduct these procedures, their living environment will be more comfortable.
On the other hand
,
however
, I believe that we should fight
climate
change
 immediately.
Although
 there are several
climate
 changes in the world, the most significant thing is global warming.
This
 can include rising temperatures and melting glaciers, which can lead to an increase in sea level. Research recently conducted by the Ministry of Environment in Japan discovered that with the rising sea levels, 20% of the land where we live now is expected to be covered by sea within the next 100 years.
Additionally
, the global population is increasing considerably. If
this
 trend continues, it will be impossible to provide enough land for our descendants in the future. In conclusion,
although
 there is a useful way to live comfortably with
climate
change
, we must do everything to remedy
climate
change
 to protect our planet.
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task achievement
While you have provided a good overview of both views and a clear position, some examples and explanations could be more thoroughly developed to strengthen your argument in favor of fighting climate change.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and flows logically from one to the other. Furthermore, focusing on specific linking phrases can improve the cohesiveness of your argument.
general
You have successfully included a clear introduction and conclusion, which effectively frame your essay and reinforce your viewpoint.
general
Your essay has a logical structure and your main points are well-supported with specific details, enhancing the readability and comprehension of your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • mitigate
  • renewable energy
  • afforestation
  • sustainable practices
  • extreme weather events
  • carbon emissions
  • infrastructure
  • agricultural practices
  • moral responsibility
  • ecosystems
  • green jobs
  • economic growth
  • job losses
  • poverty alleviation
  • quality of life
  • proactive measures
  • balanced approach
  • green technology
  • unavoidable impacts
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