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Government should spend money on railway instead of roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Government of nation should invest more in
rail
 industries
instead
 of the road. I totally disagree with the statement because both are equally important for the nation overall growth. Out of all arguments
first
 and foremost one is transportation through
railway
 is the cheapest way to
travel
.
Therefore
, those who work far from the home like to
travel
 through
rail
 rather than car or bus. For an instance, in India, about 10 million people
travel
 through the
railway
 for their day to day work which is reported by “Times of India” in his recent survey.
In addition
 to that, the best way to transport goods from one place to other another for long-distance
rail
 is a good option.
Hence
, in many countries goods are sent using the facilities of the
railway
. While
on the other hand
, the fastest means to ride within the cities or for a short distance than the road the perfect choice because it is very hard to ride through
rail
 within the cities, as well as the facility of
rail
, the facility of the
rail
 is not available in the remote area of the country. An example, in Poland only 53% of the area has the connection of the
railway
.
Next
 to that, it saves your time as well as money if you're using for a short distance. In Canada,the price of
rail
 line ticket is more to
travel
 from one city to other compare to the price of the bus as well as take the same amount of time to reach the destination. In conclusion, I would like to opine that government to should focus on both way of transport
instead
 of anyone. As both have their pros and cons.
Submitted by Renish Savaliya on

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