Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

To keep ourself healthy and fit one should be involved in any
game
.It may be
i
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an
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ndividual
game
of company
game
but both the games have
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their
own importance and qualities .Actually
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,
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it depends upon
person
to
person
to which
game
they have interest in .
thier
nature their hobby and
moreover
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their
personality helps them to choose
thier
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their
the
game
I don't think genetics would have any role in it. As far as simply playing a
game
is matter anyone can play any
game
but professionals and world-class sportsperson are very particular about
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their
specific
game
.
Team
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played
game
helps persons to work according to
team
rules and regulations they bounded to play within
thier
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their
limit as in soccer backy players don't come forward, same way goalkeeper cannot play in front whereas in individual
game
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there
their
is no
such
boundation whole sole responsibility of winning
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the
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ame is on individual sports
person
head
however
good thing is that all credit goes to one
person
only. Any positive
person
can take it in
g
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ood way, as in football if a
person
play
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good and score more goal
then
that
person
may get
g
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olden boot and prove
thier
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their
individual capability as Pele, Messy and Renaldo
have
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done. Some people may think that individual games are better as your individual decision and tricks at accurate timing and at
a
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an
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ppropriate situation can make you win your
game
but
its
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take
a lots
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a lot
lots
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of energy and your skill to do so as
o
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an
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pponent
person
too have all that qualities
for example
in tennis and swimming both
this
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these
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individual games need
l
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a
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ot of energy and strength to win
game
whereas in
team work
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teamwork
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whole the time you
n
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do
did
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ot have to use your power . In my opinion
team
game
is better as it has both side win-win situation if individually do more good in
team work
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teamwork
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you would be appreciated by all. If we don't get succeded to win the
game
then
it would be considered as
team
failure
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,
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not an individual one.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cooperation
  • team spirit
  • sense of belonging
  • community
  • leadership
  • trust
  • collective responsibility
  • dependency
  • self-reliance
  • self-discipline
  • goal setting
  • tailored development
  • flexibility
  • social support
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