Some people think that lawbreakers should be sent to prison. However, others think that better talents among those should be made to work. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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When talents break the law, whether to send them to the prison or make them work remains a contention. In my opinion,
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imprisoning is beneficial to convicts and
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, we should use their abilities in the workforce. On the one hand, prisons will help educate them and ensure the safety of
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. Prisons help rehabilitate prisoners because the guards will teach them the standard of upright conduct and life skills. With
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knowledge, criminals will adapt more to
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when they are released. What is more, it is
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a deterrent for people who intend to commit a crime.
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, were there no imprisonment, some officials would have received bribes, threatening the economic safety of the
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criminals with talents enter the workforce will promote breakthroughs and curb the lawless
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, a convict caught because of hacking into a police surveillance system must have expertise in internet security.
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, if the government arranges for him to study
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area, he will contribute to the research.
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, he will get a job opportunity, and his action will be under supervision. With income and surveillance, it is more unlikely for him to commit a crime again. In my perspective, I support the idea that lawbreakers with skills should participate in the work. In
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way, their intellectual prowess will not be wasted. As for imprisonment, it can indeed give them lessons.
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, jail terms may harden convicts against
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of the brutalizing treatment they receive.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Lawbreakers
  • Incarceration
  • Deterrent
  • Rehabilitation
  • Recidivism
  • Productive members of society
  • Public safety
  • Economic contribution
  • Societal benefit
  • Supervised programs
  • Moral debate
  • Ethical considerations
  • Root causes of crime
  • Offenders
  • Second chance
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