In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or mall to do their shopping. Is this a positive or negative development?

With the advancement in society
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many things have changed as lifestyle and living habits .With
this
contemporary era of modernisation small has suffered a lot Nowadays many small shops have been closed as customer prefer to purchase things from shopping malls. Its main effect has been seen in cities as compared to small towns If we compare both the shopping there are many things which show shopping centre shoppings are better
then
small shoppings but it has many negative impacts too due
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this
pandemic situation where all the big malls were closed customers finds better to shops from small shops . as chances of spread of disease was more in
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rowded area like malls .The good point of malls is that in
one
place we can able to purchase all the required items under
one
roof but
this
is not possible in small shops where you have to search if we are buying grocery or electric items .
Although
many small shops owner is facing problems of survival as the number of customers has reduced but good things are that many jobs have been created in the plaza for youngsters . If we see
one
side it's a positive change whereas another side its negative
one
but according to my opinion its a negative
one
because in
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ig mall there are more of mishap happening if proper security would not be there, its had has happened in passed were due to short circuit or different reasons mall has cached fire and many lives have been endangered .
Although
the price of groceries
are
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less in the mall and they always come up with
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cheme of sells why to put our life in risk just to save a few pence. In the conclusion, I must say its a negative development and
one
should have to purchase things from small shops as they are easily approachable we don't have to stand hours in the queue to pay our bills
moreover
if we want to replace any material which we don't like it can easily get replaceable but it is not true with big malls shopping as they have certain rules and regulation .
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but not
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least during
this
pandemic situation
one
should avoid to go to a crowded area and keep our self and our family safe .

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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