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In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about the law

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In some states in North America, local governments regulate the
irculation
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 rules, it is not forbidden walking with an adult who is able to control them. I believe the mentioned measure allows reduce the rate of incidents or vandalism acts, mainly in dangerous areas in the United States. Unfortunately, crimes are growing during the
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oung population. It is well-known drugs consumption since an early age has increased the number of disturbs particularly at night when they are not under adults supervision. For that reason, I believe the most relevant issue in society is the spreading of the above mention addiction in young generations. I am strongly convinced adults often are not able to control their kids, so,
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go out without a responsible adult.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • curfew
  • exposure
  • potentially dangerous situations
  • fosters
  • mindful
  • community standards
  • restrictive
  • infringe
  • personal freedom
  • law enforcement
  • breed resentment
  • root causes
  • recreational activities
  • social support systems
  • temporarily
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