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Today, more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficlult, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antartica. What are benefits or disadvantages for tourists visiting such places?

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Travelling the world has become a passion for people these days, a few individuals most probably spend their half of life while travelling.
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, visiting extreme places
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 as the Sahara Desert and Antarctica are in the trend for young folks even these places are potentially dangerous and life-threatening. There are a plethora of benefits of it, like as, building the self-confidence in though situations, a sense of achievement and many more,
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, the trend has a lot of disadvantages as, life-threatening and serious injuries.
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 with, the most effective benefit of aforementioned trend is to gain the self-confidence in these types of situations, during their travel people face a lot of obstacles, but still, they have to fight with it and complete their summit.
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, travellers would become eligible to find their capabilities and sometimes could create new records for others with their achievements.
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, there was a group of people, who climbed Mount Everest and created the world record.
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, travelling in extremely dangerous places have many disadvantages too.
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 people making the world records by doing adventurous travel activities they put their lives into danger, sometimes these situations might be given them a life long injury, which may make them immobile for their whole life,
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, there were too many people, who died while trying to climb the Everest and some of them got serious injuries. In conclusion,
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, adventurous kind of travel puts people into the atrocious danger but
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 made them dependent on someone else.
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, people could pursue
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 type of activities with full preparation and planning so they could avoid unnecessary hurdles and risks.
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