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Some people believe that is good to share as much information as possible in scientific business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

#people #information #business #world
Many of people believe that
information
 should be shared directly with fields of education, science and
business
,
however
, negative attitudes for
information
 sharing is that some vital and significant experience may not be available or accessible to others.
For
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 my opinion, due to humanist and equal environment,
i
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nformation should be shared more frequently. Scientists should share their latest discoveries with other resources around the world,
such
 as
,
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 cure of fatal disease or environment-friendly products and they have a
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 to achieve acceptability worldwide.
Moreover
, new teaching methods, expanded curriculum and latest analyses of child
behavior
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 should be shared by academics and they use distance-learning to assist remote areas students even in abroad countries. As far as,
business
 people perspective, transform their secret points, future goals with entrepreneurs give pleasure and keep
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ustainability of their
business
. Lots of people don’t like to idea of sharing
information
 and ideas for several resources. One of them is the risk of losing their
business
 which may threaten of future of
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ompany,
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Coca-cola company has never shared their formula with other brands while Tesla company published all documents of electronic vehicles to make our planet better. By the booming of technology, many
of
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hackers and identify theft reveals so people afraid and avoid to share their
information
 and personal data. Briefly, I believe that regulation and limitation should take place for sharing
information
,
such
 as personal pictures, videos, plans and people gain insight into humanity and assist other people with all of their
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