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some people say that school children should learn how to grow food and cook with it in their lessons. what is your opinion about that?

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A lot of people nowadays think that the exploitation of animals is not good whereas many people thought that to fulfil human needs animals should be employed which includes
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 and
research
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. In
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 essay,we are going to discuss the positive and negative effects of wildlife exploitation. In
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 world,we have no right to give pain to anybody but we used animals for
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 and
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 which kills them. I have seen lots of meats shops where animals are killed brutally to satisfy the human
food
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 needs and animal are
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 used for
research
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 which led to the killing of hundreds of animals on earth. People should think about the killing of animals. Overall, we should not kill
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 animal and we need to find an alternative way to satisfy our
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 needs.
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,we cannot survive without the exploitation of animals because lots of people around the world have only survived on animals. Animals in form od
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 give us a healthy
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 and we need people in the science field to do experiments but we cannot directly apply the experiments on human as human
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 is more important than animals.
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, we should limit the use of animals for
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 and study. In my opinion,it is inhumane to kill and exploit animals because they
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 and we have no right to kill and hurt them in any way. We should think in a way that how we feel if somebody kills us or our family, so the animals
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 have the right to live and enjoy their
life
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