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Some people say that spending time to develop a successful career is more important. Others say that spending time with friends and family is more important.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
this
 era, it is noticed that spending a balanced life is very difficult because people have their own priorities some people want to
career
 development so they give more
time
 to focus their professional growth and other want to spend quality
time
 with their family and friends and give them value over the work-life. I believe to manage the
time
 is difficult but not impossible; people should have to give
time
 to both essentials. On the one hand, usually, youngster gives more importance to their
career
 growth over the family. Those people give more importance to their
career
 development because they taste the struggle and hard
time
 in terms of parents.
Therefore
, they prefer to spend
time
 on their workplace for their luxury life.
For example
, those youngsters want to spend more
time
 at their workplaces who want to have become rich and want to fulfil their dreams because they feel the pain of struggle.
On the other hand
, some people want to spend quality
time
 with their family and friend and make good memories. Nothing can replace d from family either it is work or sports.
For instance
, elderly people spend their
time
 with old pictures and memories which they spent with their love ones. In my opinion, young people should have to give priority to their love ones over the work and make good memories for their old ages.
However
, give the
time
 business and the job is
also
 important because it provides a better lifestyle. In conclusion, it is a long debate with no answer.
However
, a successful
career
 and family both have their own values and both have their own significance. People should have managed their equally and dedicate to their work as well as their family.
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