In the modern fast-pacing world, people are able to be contacted by
phone
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almost 24 hours a day. While
this
tendency may cause
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exhaustion as well as other
health
issues, I am convinced that it mostly brings convenience to a person and unites a
society
.
On the one hand, answering calls anytime and anywhere may be a key
factor
of a person's severe exhaustion and cause global
health
problems. Being in contact around the clock means that an individual may be disturbed even during a vacation or at midnight which may lower one’s energy level due to lack of sleep or rest.
Moreover
,
this
might be a crucial element in developing various
health
issues, namely insomnia or anxiety when a person is constantly disturbed.
Therefore
, it might lead to an informational overload in
society
globally as well as be a cause of psychological disorders.
For instance
, Japanese workers are known for their workaholic attitude which is expressed in constantly answering their
phone
or checking their mail.
This
mostly costs those workers their
health
and even might lead to suicides due to the lack of rest and
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ossibility to relax.
On the other hand
, the ability to be always in touch through a
phone
could help to react faster to any emergency as well as to organize a big group of people. Having a smartphone gives an opportunity to contact a family member or a co-worker in case of any problem at home or workplace and find an urgent solution to it.
Moreover
, the possibility of being contacted immediately provides
society
with a key instrument of uniting people to tackle important social problems.
For instance
, in Ukraine in 2013 there was the so-called Dignity Revolution when a huge number of protestants were able to gather in less than 15 minutes just by making
phone
calls to each other.
This
helped them to defend themselves from being beaten by governmental enforcers and was a crucial
factor
in the whole revolutionary process.
To conclude,
phone
calls can be answered anytime these days. While
this
may be a disturbing
factor
for one’s
health
and for a
society
in general, I believe that it is a
factor
of
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big importance for reacting to any type of urgency as well as for uniting a
society
.