Some countries invest in specialized sports facilities for top athletes but not for the average people. Is this a positive or negative development?

It is argued that many countries invest in specialized sports facilities for top athletes but not for the average people. I completely disagree with investing in facilities only for top athletes. Countries should invest in specialized facilities not only for top athletes but for average people
also
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since
this
will benefit improving and developing young athletes and
also
motivating average people to develop a healthy
lifestyle
.
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reason to invest in specialized facilities for all population is to give the opportunity for young adults and children the option of developing themselves to be a better athlete. By having great specialized facilities, the young athletes can improve their skills, train with top coaches and
in other words
becoming the
next
top athletes of the country. A great example is a young swimmer that needs to practice in a measured professional Olympic swimming pool, he cannot get that kind of
facility
in any other place
then
a specialized
facility
.
As a result
of investing for all athletes, the country will develop more and better top athletes. Another point to consider is to invest for all population due to motivating the average people to live a healthier
lifestyle
. Today not many people understand the meaning of exercising and nutrition. Investing in sports facilities for the average citizen it will increase and motivate the average person to exercise and learn more about
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ealthy
lifestyle
. It is known that by opening a new specialized
facility
would increase the
citizens
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motivation to sign and use the
facility
by 70%.
For instance
, a new basketball court will increase the desire among people to use it more. In conclusion, I strongly believe that countries should consider investing in specialized sports facilities for
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average people and top athletes. Because of the combination of developing young athletes and increasing healthier
lifestyle
among average people.
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