Nowadays, families are not as close as in the past and a lot of people have become used to this. why is this happening? do the advantages of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

In the current era, joint families are not existing, everywhere mostly we see nuclear families. The main reason for
this
is to seek opportunities.
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lethora of benefits to these trends,
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there are few demerits too. By staying together one can grow family
business
and be successful, but as there are fewer chances of creating
such
family
business
because of lack of financial capital to get started with, many think of finding
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business
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ell-developed
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Such
well-developed cities can be away from their family, even there is
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ossibility to land in another country to grab
such
an opportunity. So it becomes mandatory to be away from family because one can not afford to pay rent to accommodate everyone in the family.
Moreover
, as they settle in another
city
, which is away from family, they find it comfortable, because
this
habit avoids conflicts and family disputes. Another advantage is to expand the connections with other
city
residents, which can develop new
business
ideas and jobs. Interaction with natives of another country
for example
can generate interest in learning new language and culture, banking on
this
can lead to more fruitful life
such
as language translation services or hospitality businesses.
On the other hand
, there is a chance of disrespecting family contacts because of the distance,
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video calls and voice calls, still physical touch has
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reat sense of understanding. To mitigate
this
one should have a month break every year to meet all the family members either in
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ative
city
or current
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amily bonding. In conclusion, there are many merits on staying away from family but certain drawbacks do exist. One should stay connected by digital means with family members and occasionally physical meetups will keep the bond of
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amily happy.
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