Prison is the best punisment. Do you agree or disagree?

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Prison might not be un ultimate option for punishing for criminals.

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rison will not fix the problem. It teaches

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criminals a lot of other worst things

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as drugs. people who go to jails for certain crime will go back and do the same thing or

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, there should be an alternate way of stopping crimes. That might include, teaching people how is it look like

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life in prison. Visiting jails,

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other people who went to jail before and people who are present now and what they wish to do if they are out. I conclude that

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punishing the criminals by taking to prison will not stop crime nor teach prisoners the right.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

120 words

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Prison is the best punisment. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work. in another country if they wish, Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many feel that common educational system of teachers and students ina a classroom will be replaced by the year 2050 do you agree with this view give your opinion?

Some parents believe that their children their children should do extra curricular activities after shcool. Others say in this was, children are under pressure. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

some people say that teenagers should work part-time and earn money. This way they will learn basic lesson about work abs become more disciplined other argue that teenagers shouldn't sacrifice their rest and after school activities to work. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.