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Some people think everyone should be a vegetarian, because we do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Public attitudes towards the eating of
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 have shifted and some believe all of us should only eat a vegetable diet which is healthier. I agree with
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 to a large extent, but not in entirety. The idea of banning
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 from
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 altogether would be a highly controversial move and it is difficult to see what long-term advantage would be gained from
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 There is evidence of a clear link between the over breeding of livestock and environmental decay, (example needed) and
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 results in large areas of land being required to breed animals
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 as pigs, sheep and cattle. Obviously these creatures rely upon grass and other naturally grown produce.
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 usage of arable pasture has a damaging impact on the environment, with the water cycle particularly affected as well as the obvious increase in carbon emissions due to the lack of carbon absorbing foliage.
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, millions of people across the world rely upon the
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 of
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 to earn a living, from farmers to
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 producers and restaurateurs Millions of jobs would be lost instantly if a universal ban on
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consumption
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 was introduced.
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, one only need consider the impact on fast food vendors
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 as McDonald's and KFC: simply imagine the effects
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 huge job losses would incur should those chains go out of business. I believe that people should do more to address their own personal
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consumption
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 rather than any overall cut.
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 eating does pose a threat to the environment so people should certainly try to eat less. Even so,
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 does not mean I support a wholesale ban on
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consumption
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