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In many parts of the world, people are choosing to have fewer children. Why do you think this is happening? What impacts may it have on society?

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With the passage of
time
, people around the world had decided to have fewer kids. Some people consider that
this
 is happening as people have to spend more
time
 at work and have less
time
 to be at home with their families.
This
 essay will discuss
this
 reason, as well as, the effects that
this
 has on society.
To begin
 with, some parents need to spend more
time
 at work than at home, which has made them choose to have just one or two kids. A professor at The University of Sydney explains that when he interviewed parents, 75 per cent of them said that they choose to have fewer children as in
this
 way they could spend more
time
 each of them.
This
 could indicate that increased work
time
 and reduce home
time
 is a major reason for having fewer children. Having fewer children has had positive and negative effects on society. In the positive side, it has helped to reduce global
population
.
This
 is important as less
population
 have a direct impact on the reduction of waste and global warming.
However
, in the negative aspects,it may result in having more older than the younger
population
. A city in Kansas is a clear example of
this
 negative and positive effect since 1985 people decided to have just one or no children,
this
 has resulted in a reduction of 50
percent
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 of their waste production.
However
, now most of their
population
 is over the age of 75 and there is not that many younger people to take care of them. In conclusion, it can be seen that over the world many people are opting for having fewer children. Some people consider that
this
 is happening as parents have less available
time
 to have bigger families.
Although
 it has positive effects on society
such
 as reducing global
population
, it
also
 has negative effects as no having younger populations.
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