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In many cities the construction of new houses and office buildings is not controlled. This leads to people building in whatever style they want without thinking about design. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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The lack of control for the building of new structures leads to society randomly build their houses without thinking about the design of the exterior.
Although
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 the population can create the plan of their own buildings on one’s pat, it is considered by eminent architects
such
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 as Frank Gery that
this
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 trend negatively affects the general picture of cities, making them unattractive. On one hand, uncontrolled construction is one benefit for people planning buildings according to their taste and
this
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also
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allow
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allows

The verb allow does not seem to agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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 them to use
multicolored
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multicoloured

The spelling of multicolored is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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 paints and various building materials. As
the
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a

It appears that the article the may be incorrect in this context. Consider changing it.

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 result of
this
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, the visitors of the towns can observe chaotically stylized streets with
such
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 houses.
For example
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, being in Colombo Sri-Lanka, tourists see many streets having the houses without similar styles, creating among the palms, to put it mildly, a strange picture.
On the other hand
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, not styled buildings on the streets of cities negatively affect visitors.
In other words
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,
this
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 forms a messy appearance of the city, reducing its level of prestige and attractiveness. According to an article
of
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by

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 the architect Frank Gery, thinking about journeys or business, people unlikely to decide to go to graceless cities, because
this
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 might affect people’s moods negatively.
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, one of the famous programmer John Wee wanted to invite the prestigious programmers to work together in Grodno Belarus, but due to the unattractiveness of the city
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,

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they refused the offer. To conclude, the ability to build houses out of control can lead to an unattractive district or city.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • architectural diversity
  • dynamic cityscape
  • cultural expression
  • tailored buildings
  • sense of ownership
  • innovation
  • energy efficiency
  • bureaucratic processes
  • housing shortages
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure strain
  • traffic congestion
  • quality of life
  • cultural heritage
  • environmental impact
  • safety standards
  • structural weaknesses
  • natural disasters
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