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In some countries, health care and education are only partially funded by the government. Which do you think is better in terms of quality: free public healthcare and education or privately paid health care and education?

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 present world, some people think partially funded health
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 and
education
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 will raise the
quality
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 of life while others think the free public-funded health
care
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 and scholarship are better in terms of
quality
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.
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 essay completely agrees with the suggestion that the privately paid health
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 and teaching are better in terms of
quality
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. In
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 essay, we will look at the
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 in advantages of partially funded by the
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 as well as the negative feedback of free public
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 and
education
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.
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, when the
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 partially funded
healthcare
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 and
education
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 that will help to a significant increase in
quality
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 of life.
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, when people have to take the duty to pay their
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 service
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 as cure and
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 in hospital when they sick
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 pay for their learning that will support the state to provide good service because save more budget.
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, the reason why free public
healthcare
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 and
education
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 will lead to a decrease in
quality
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 is less response from people.
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, when the population used to get everything easily and for free will not be aware of how much that costs the
government
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 and have no idea how much that valuable. In conclusion, privately paid from people will support state money as well as encourage and motivate community member to look after good work and save their salary to educate their child. I recommended helping the
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 field and
education
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 field by the
government
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 to be in high-
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 service provide and make that costs people to get it to be careful about
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 duty and now how much that valuable.
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