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Beauty is in the eyes of the beholder. What do you think this means? Do you agree with this statement?

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There is a proverb, saying 'beauty is in the eyes of the beholder'.
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 means that the views people have on how beautiful an object is not the same and I completely agree with
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 statement.
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 with, the old saying indicates that the standard of aesthetics depends on individuals. It is not uncommon that people express different opinions while looking at the same artistic item.
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, Mona Lisa is a famous painting and many beholders of it confess how enigmatic her smile is.
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, there are still quite a large number of those who do not understand why she is well known worldwide.
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, some strange, rather bizarre sculptures and drawings,
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, can be inspiring to some. The best example of
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 would be abstract paintings. Granted that art is hardwired for all humans and the feeling towards something beautiful must be very similar, but I believe that the definition of beauty is different from person to person.
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 is because everyone has a different educational background and life experiences, which usually affect their perspectives. Taking myself as an example, I spent most of my childhood in the countryside and overseas countries where their nature is well preserved.
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, I think I am fed up with natural scenery, no matter how magnificent it is.
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, multiple numbers of people who visited Australia told me that the natural environment of the country is overwhelming, in which my family lives and I stayed for almost 2 years, and I absolutely feel the other way round. In conclusion, nobody has the same opinion about levels of beauty and I think it is due to the education and experiences people gain throughout their life.
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