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Marketing and promotion is the key to a successful business. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#promotion #business
It is often argued that people these days do
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 in the family and social life agree that working hours should be reduced and controlled
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 essay would discuss the negative effect of working hours on the individual and the families and how it is beneficial to restrict working time.
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 hours spent on a job means less leisure time with leads to stress and mental problems.
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people would take more sick leaves on subsequent days due to the work overload.
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, due to the covid-19 outbreak nurses in many hospitals are asked to do extra shifts which made many of them to fall prey to the disease and they should be some legal methods to restrict the job was to prevent the employees from getting sick even though employees promise extra money it is not a solution for one's health which once lost is lost forever for the more long what time
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 has started to mental effect on the employees family and social life more and more cases of divorce and extramarital affair have risen over the years because of his spouse staying away from homes for work
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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