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Not enough students choose science subjects in universities in many countries. What are the reasons and what are the effects to the society?

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Most students have less willingness to choose subjects related to
science
 in colleges in many countries, which causes some impacts on our society. In the following essay, the reasons behind it and the possible effects are going to be discussed.
First
 of all, many students have less motivation
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tudy
science
 subjects because of the influence of parents who suggest children
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choose fields related to technology as it is considered a money-making field. The reason behind
this
 is that getting richer is an indicator of success.
For example
, a recent study indicated that the number of students choosing technology as majors seen a huge increase over the years.
Secondly
, universities providing
science
 subjects do not provide more incentives,
such
 as better scientific equipment or elites in the field, to attract students to do research.
Consequently
, students who want to pursue a
science
 career need to study abroad.
However
, the tuition of renowned academic institutions is normally too high to afford, which causes the change in their professional pursuit. The lack of graduates for
science
 subjects may bring negative effects to a country’s
science
 development as
science
 is a foundation of innovation. Without innovation, a country relies only on traditional industries that mainly depend on
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abour force, which causes countries to lose their international competitiveness. Eventually, it leads to stagnation of a country’s
further
 development, causing economic difficulties.
In addition
, a more damaging effect of having no new apprentices in
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cience field is that countries will eventually lack specialists in
science
 and need to depend on other countries. In the long run, their development cannot keep up with the pace of other countries. In the conclusion, there are many factors to decrease students’ willingness to choose
science
 subjects like whether they can get a higher payment or have enough resource do research in the future. When nobody has the motivation in
this
 area, it will impact on nation’s competitiveness and financial problems.
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