Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Almost every day of the week, you can read stories about encouraging children in

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ivalry in newspapers. In

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issue has aroused much controversy among parents and people working in

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ducational environment. Some people reckon that competitive

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environment

is lucrative to the pupils;

on the other hand

, others have debated

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the idea that

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ducational system should

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concentrate

on collaboration.

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,

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is not an easy question to answer,

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, in

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argument

are going to be discussed. On the one hand, some people opine that children have to

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brought

up in competitive surrounding due to the

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that boost the

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process

of learning paramount skills. They are stimulated to work harder to

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acquire

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knowledge

during school. In

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, competitiveness leads them

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ttain a high level of

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achievement

.

As a result

, their path work will be splendid.

For instance

, a child who has gained a vast majority academic

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achievements

achievement

,

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,praised by teachers, and

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will have a

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of

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satisfaction

,

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have an

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opportunity

to

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in one of the best universities all around the world.

On the other hand

, some people believe, it is plain that pupils co-

oprate

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operate

in different activities during their educational period, owing to the

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acquiring moral traits, like empathy and teamwork which leads to

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from others, and

also

enhance previous

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knowledge

or skills. Indeed, by taking a part in

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teamwork

team works

,

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work

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toghether

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together

to achieve a specific goal, they would be able to learn from their peers,

consequently

, will be

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useful

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adult

into society. In the final analysis, I

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personally

go along with the idea that

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we have to make a healthy balance between competing and co-

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operating

operation

.

As a result

, people with beneficial skills would be contributed to the world.