a lot of old people are suffering from lonliness these days.They are also lack physical fitness. what are problems. how to solve this problem?

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can not live without any other companion because if we are surrounded by family
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friends
and our wellwishers we feel
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ense of joys ,it
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us invigorate which not only help us to
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negatity
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negativity
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erson need some partner in their life as a soulmate which
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their life together till death .
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of one
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nothing else better . As we
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as we become older and older our sufferings add on in our lives which be more painful if you are alone .lonliness is
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ulprit of all sufferings .High blood press ,
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diabetes
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,parkinsonisms
artheritis
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arthritis
arhtherities
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authorities
and
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forgetfulness is
some of the major
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diseases
which affects in
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old age
persons in short physical fitness is major problems in old
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people
many times they were bed
riddenand
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ridden and
need health care assistance
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problems become more
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if sufferer live alone or away from their residential area where other needful things are not
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available
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solved not leaving them alone
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ome if possible better to
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ship
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them in old age home .encoraging
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persons
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to live society
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