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In the past, most people spend their entire career working for one company, whereas people nowadays move from one job to another. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each? Which do you think is better? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, with the development of technologies and border opening between countries, there are lots of
job
 opportunities for everybody. Some people tend to keep seeking a suitable
job
 or move from
one
job
 to another, while others spend all their working time to
work
 for
one
company
 as they used to in the past. In my opinion, I believe both views have upsides and downsides, but people could be free to choose their
job
 and
change
 their career whenever they want. On the
one
 hand, some people would argue that working for the same
company
 in their entire life gives them stability. They can become an expert for
one
job
 so they can have a stable income and respect from their colleague.
Moreover
, long-term employees could get some benefits which are no
one
 who works for a
company
 in
one
 or two years could get
such
 as insurance or pension..etc. I think working for
one
job
 for entire life is not suitable for everyone and
this
one
 can create boring and stagnation. Lots of people admit that they could not found their motivation at
work
 cause sometimes they did not even have to think when they
work
.
On the other hand
, I think the reality that people have the ability and opportunities to move from
one
job
 to another is an improvement. When people have a chance to
change
 their
job
 or even their careers, they
also
 have a chance to explore their abilities.
For example
, I found my passion at
work
 after I changed my
job
 from a big
company
 to a smaller
one
, whether got me a lot of interesting works and friendly co-workers.
Nevertheless
, changing jobs more often can make people feel
Nevertheless
, changing jobs more often can make people feel tired when they have to
change
 their accommodation, their co-workers and maybe their friend. But I believe that changing jobs is a better choice for people which can help people explore themselves so they see things differently that can create excitement and working efficiency. To sum up, while working for the same
company
 all our lives can benefit us in some ways, I believe that the chance to
change
 our
job
 can motivate us to develop stronger.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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