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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that educational institutions focus more on teaching factual information to the
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, rather than incorporating functional skills. I entirely agree with
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 view, and various amendments have to be introduced to enhance the standards of the schooling system. On the one hand, there are clear arguments that prove theoretical instruction is predominant in the educational sector. In the first place, most of the learning establishments fundamentally follow a pedagogy based on
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facts and theories.
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, the scope for the practical implementation of various skills that have been taught is very limited, because textbooks that are used for it primarily
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 a detailed conceptual explanation, rather than a practical approach.
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, examinations conducted in schools don't test pragmatic abilities,
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 they are introduced to
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 only in university education.
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, research done on
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 education system revealed that 95% of the
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 never faced a realistic test until their graduation.
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, I agree with the viewpoint that many institutions lack sufficient infrastructure to offer functional instructions to the
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.
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, they don't possess a wide range of equipment and facilities
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 as laboratories, workshops and manufacturing units, and
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,learners graduate without any first-hand experience.
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, I
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 feel that they are short of efficient tutors with a pragmatic thought process.
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, schools in rural areas of Thailand do not have access to basic classrooms, and unless governments provide financial aid, these cannot be upgraded. On the whole, a similar situation is observed in several developing countries, and they all remain to continue teaching hypothetical methodologies. In conclusion, it certainly seems to me that, tutors focus on teaching facts at every level of education taught in schools, colleges and universities, and tend to ignore
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practical learning.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rote memorization
  • practical skills
  • adaptable skills
  • critical thinking
  • balanced approach
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • workforce readiness
  • real-life challenges
  • technological advancements
  • information management
  • creativity hindrance
  • lifelong learning
  • skill development
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