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Some people believe that entertainers are more important than scientists. Do you agree or disagree? Support with reasons and examples from your own experience.

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In the modern world, some people think artists
such
 as singers and comedian are more important than compared to researchers. I partly agree with the above statement as I believe both the parties
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 in our lives and throughout
this
 essay, I will explain it in detail. On the one hand,performers have a huge impact on our day-to-day lives because they help humans to
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relax
 their mind. To explain more, listening to one of your favourite songs or watching a comedy show after a hectic day at work can reduce the stress level of
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uman body.
For instance
, A study done
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 London University found out that, people can decrease their stress level by 75% by just watch one of their favourite TV
programes
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programmes
programs
.
Moreover
,
entertaitment
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entertainment
 can bring people together.
As a result
, it helps to create a strong family bonding.
Hence
, singers and comedians are major ways to
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obtain
 a peaceful mind and reduce the stress level of
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uman body.
On the other hand
,
scienctists
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scientists
 are necessary because they help
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society to prevent
from
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deadly diseases. To live a long happy life you need to be stress-free as well as stay away from different illness.
Furthermore
, technologists are helping humans to improve their lifestyle by introducing latest technology
such
 as laptops and mobile phones with new features.
For example
, due to the invention of Google maps
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it is easy to find
a
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adress
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dress
 within few seconds.
Also
, researchers are trying their best to find a cure for COVID-19.
Thus
, it is certain that
scienctist
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scientist
scientists
palys
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plays
 a vital role and they are essential as well. To sum up, even though, entertainers are important in our lives to get relax during our busy schedule, researchers
also
 equally essential as they help us to improve our lifestyle and live longer.
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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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