Computers becoming essential part of school lessons. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, the information age has highly necessary had computers to
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elieve that it is an important tool in the
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important to have
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technological
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disadvantages and provide my opinion when is necessary. Currently, some people consider the
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technological
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is likely to be some
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ddiction to social networking or games.
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ncrease in young people and children allow to spent a
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amount of time in front of computers or tv it has a detrimental consequence in terms of
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a sedentary life and diseases
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obesity.
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social networks being
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the
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of computers in the
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having addictive
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teenagers
, there are good reasons to continue promoting the
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technological
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in the
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by the world because as soon as
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when started the academic life or job life you will need to manage different
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technological
resources to proper
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communication
. Another potential reason is if you learn to manage different software, design programs, even send proper emails, it would become a modern student.
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, some
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nternet each one need do an
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and they are able to transform the data and information in graphics and
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why the computers are becoming essential in
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process. In
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some people consider the
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omputer is a disadvantage in terms of promoting
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edentary lifestyle, It is particularly
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of computers are academic develop on
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years because it allows
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an excellent professional for the future. Based
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my knowledge, the computers in the modern
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why children
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tennagers
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ages of studies.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Edutainment
  • Multimedia resources
  • E-learning platforms
  • Digital literacy
  • Cyberbullying
  • Ergonomic hazards
  • Cognitive overload
  • Technological proficiency
  • Blended learning environments
  • Instructional technology
  • Adaptive software
  • Screen time management
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