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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?

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The graph provided illustrates information about how many people visited a Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017. As presented in the chart, the number of total travellers steadily increased. According to the graph, there was an increase in the
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 for tourists either staying on cruise or
island
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 from 1
million
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 to 3.5
million
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 over the given period. statistics for People
s
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who
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tayed on the
island
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 remained around 750 thousand from 2010 until 2011 and it figures rapidly grew up to the highest point of 1.5
million
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 in 2013. Afterwards, the figures were maintained for 2 consecutive years in a row until 2017 with a dip in 2016. Turning to the
figure
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 for tourists staying on the
island
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, there was no major fluctuation from 2010 to 2012
although
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 there was a slight growth in 2011.
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, the statistics for visitors dramatically increased and its
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 was surpassing the
figure
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 for tourist staying cruise ships in 2016 and
then
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 reached a peak of 2
million
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 in 2017.
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