Some people think that success in sport is mainly depends on physical abilities while others think that there other important factors. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some people believe that being
one
of the best athletes is the most related to body activity factor while others believe that still exist numerous factors to be successful in
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port.
First
of all,if someone is sporty gifted,
this
provides an opportunity for him/her to be at the top of the list among lots of workout
proffessionals
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professionals
but not adequate.
For instance
,
one
of my friends who had wide shoulders and six-packs has not been training himself for approximately 6 months and now he is over-weight and should start them from the beginning.
Therefore
, being physically talented is not all things.
Second
of all, we should consider the other significant elements, like effort, healthy, hormones etc.As more explain, level of Thyroid hormone is
one
of the most critical issues in being fat or thin or having a healthy or unhealthy lifestyle.Another substantial factor is someone's skeleton or level of Calcium in his/her body.If someone does not have enough Calcium or strong bones, he/she likely confront serious bone injuries during workout.
Thus
, check up our important body elements before starting to exercise has
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emarkable impact on touching our purpose which is mentioned. In my opinion,we have lots of options on our path to achieve success in diversity
sport
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fields that we should carry on most of them to eventually face with our aim
that is
being
one
of the
toppest
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athletes.Not only being talented in exercise but
also
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ffort,have an expert coach and rhythm of inhaling and exhaling are important.
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