Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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public health
sports facilities
physical activity
exercise
chronic diseases
heart disease
obesity
inclusivity
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safe environment
social interaction
community engagement
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health education programs
environmental factors
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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Fully explain your ideas

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Many people beleive that high sugar levels cause more health problems. make it more expensive to reduce the health issues. do you agree or disagree ?

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