Some feel executives in large companies should receive high salaries while others think they are paid too much compared to ordinary workers. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many argued over the idea of what should be the executives pay grade. Some believe that it might above the necessity level compared to an average worker, while others think that a high
salary
is justified. In my opinion, managers deserve to be paid more from the simple reason
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different levels of responsibility and Hierarchy at
work
. On one hand, paying
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igh
salary
to managers is the right path to go according to some people’s opinions. When it comes to a big variety of responsibilities and commitments to provide excellent results, a high wage level is justified. Executives who have more experience and years in the company, know how to complete the job and use it for the company’s interest will make their high
salary
legitimate.
For example
, Harvey is an executive and a known lawyer in New York
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law firm, he has a lot of experience and plenty of cases that he won. In
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esult of that Harvey will get a big
salary
because of his clients, effective
work
and his experience, which
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even though he’s
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much larger than his assistants or interns.
On the other hand
, some people strongly believe that paying a high
salary
to a manager might negatively affect the
work
environment when it comes to the average employee. In a result of that paying
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a higher
salary
will cause the other workers to feel unmotivated, not important and ineffective as a working force in the company.
Furthermore
, it will affect the leadership ability that the executive has over the
workers
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cause of the gap that was created by the high
salary
. A great example for
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in Mcdonalds
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if the branch manager would get a much higher
salary
than the cashiers it will make the common low paid workers feel unappreciated in compare to the administrator which result
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a decrease in the motivation to
work
. I agree with not letting the
salary
to be much higher because it is important to keep the average paid workers happy and motivated at the company by not making a gap between them. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions. Personally, I think that raising the
salary
for managers will cause a gap between the simple employees and the executives that will negatively affect the workplace in many ways like
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