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More and more people are stressed today than ever before. What are the causes of this stress? Can you suggest some possible solutions?

#people #stress
The number of people reporting that they experience
stress
 has increased dramatically in recent years. Among the reasons that lead to
this
 are demanding jobs, overcrowded urban areas and
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 with information.
However
, there are some ways how the issue can be overcome. It is undeniable that the main factor that causes
stress
 is work. The labour market has become highly competitive and in order to secure their job
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people work on the verge of their abilities, which ends up in the increased level of
stress
. Another factor causing
stress
 is overpopulated cities. Constant noise, traffic jams and polluted atmosphere have a negative effect on people's nerve systems.
Finally
, the amount of information that an individual is exposed to has risen significantly causing
stress
 and depression, as
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most of
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nformation they receive is negative. The good news is that the issue can be solved by following some simple rules.
First
 of all, a person should learn how to reach a healthy work-life balance.
For example
, plan a working day wisely without overworking, and spend more quality time with family and friends. Another rule is to spend more time in green areas like parks or woods, as greenery spaces reduce the level of
stress
 and have a positive effect on the brain. Doing exercises and having a quality night sleep
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 effective not only in dealing with
stress
, but
also
 in boosting the immune system, and that helps to stay healthy physically and
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mentally
. To sum up,
although
 the factors that cause
stress
 cannot be eliminated completely, people can alleviate the negative influence of it by applying some basic rules to their daily routine.
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