Many people believe that the high levels of violence in films today are causing serious social problems. What are these problems and how could they be reduced?

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Discussion regarding
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aspects as increased
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in films
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conducted for a long time. On the one hand, viewing
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pictures negatively affects children and is the backbone for their psychological perception of reality. Films with an increased
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from showing on TV. All over the world, there is an increase in the
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specially pronounced trend can be traced in the age group from 12 to 18 years, respectively. Films containing scenes of
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, cruelty to animals, and propaganda of criminal ideas have a strong influence on children of
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age. According to the Social University of London, children's susceptibility to
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ideas is especially high between the ages of 10 and 18, which is confirmed by statistics. The juvenile delinquency rate rose 30
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in 2019 from a year earlier.
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fully confirms the fact that watching films negatively affects children. The solution to
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problem must be radical. A prime example is North Korea, where television is sovereign and films that are released are censored. According to statistics, the crime rate in
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country is at a very low
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and one of the reasons is the restriction in watching movies with violent scenes.
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, restrictions on films with scenes of
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were imposed in China, where the
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of social discontent was very high due to the propaganda of Western films with pronounced scenes of immoral
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in society, which began to have a dramatically negative impact on society in China, especially in the age group from 12 to 21 years old. In conclusion, it should be noted that social problems are largely caused by the propaganda of cruelty on TV screens, and especially children who find it difficult to distinguish between truth and fiction in
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films fall under
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influence.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitization
  • empathy
  • aggressive behaviors
  • imitation
  • antisocial behavior
  • normalization
  • climate of fear
  • perceptions
  • mental health
  • aggression
  • emotional regulation
  • trauma-related symptoms
  • age ratings
  • critical viewing skills
  • nonviolent entertainment
  • film industry
  • regulate
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