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Some people say young people should be completely free to choose their future job but others think young people must be more realistic in their choice. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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There are a number of people who believe that the younger generation has to have freedom in their
job
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 and
career
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 choices. Meanwhile, there are those who argue with it and declaim that the youngsters should not pursue their dreaming
job
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, but concentrate on reality
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. In
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 essay, I will examine
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 sides of the argument and
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 I will give my own opinion on the matter. On one side of the argument are those who support young people in their desire to independently choose their future
job
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.
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 is because every person has to fulfil their dreams and a satisfying
career
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 choice is one of the essential parts of human happiness.
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, a person will find that their life happens to be miserable and daunting.
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, one of the financial experts having a fortune on his bank accounts, suddenly committed suicide due to the fact that he hated financial consulting and was spending his whole life doing it. On the other side, modern people are extremely influenced by social media and almost everyone does not want to pursue a traditional
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 path and want to be a self-employed blogger, model or fitness star.
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, some people argue that it is not possible for each and every young adult to survive without having in high demand occupation and
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 why they have to be more realistic in their
job
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 choices. To illustrate, plenty of young people who did not want to complete a former education and work on traditional jobs ended up without an education and unemployed. In my opinion,
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 sides of the argument have their merits. On balance,
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, I believe that a young person at the moment of choosing their future occupation has to consider
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 their soul desire and demand for their
career
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 choice. From my perspective, it is always necessary to have a back-up plan in case of failure.
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, if somebody finds themselves unemployed, they can always change their
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 path on the available at the moment. In conclusion, having considered
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 opinions, I think that young people have to take into account
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 sides and remember that they are living in turbulent times. In fact, there is no safe option for choosing a future
job
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.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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