Many jobs used to be done at home by hand, but nowadays an increasing number of them are done using machines instead. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this development.
A decade ago,
people
were
preferred to Unnecessary verb
apply
doing
their Wrong verb form
do
task
at home by Fix the agreement mistake
tasks
hands
and they Fix the agreement mistake
hand
avoid
using Wrong verb form
avoided
science
inventions. Replace the word
scientific
Whereas
, in the present era, individual
love Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
for
handling machines Change preposition
apply
for
their daily routine Change preposition
in
works
. It has lots of advantages but we cannot neglect the downsides of Fix the agreement mistake
work
usage
of Correct article usage
the usage
technologies
.
On the one hand, there are a plethora of advantages of using machines which can save a lot of occasions and perform better than humans. Fix the agreement mistake
technology
For
example
washing clothes manually Add a comma
example,
consume
too much, water and detergent. Correct subject-verb agreement
consumes
Therefore
, people
use a washing machine for
wash Change preposition
to
bucket
of clothes at one time and save their water and detergent Fix the agreement mistake
buckets
also
. Moreover
, people
use a
kitchen Correct article usage
apply
appliance
like Fix the agreement mistake
appliances
blender
, microwaves and Fix the agreement mistake
blenders
refrigerator
for cooking food and Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
preserved
it for a long time.
Wrong verb form
preserving
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks of
using technologies which can affect our health and fitness. In Change preposition
to
past
Correct article usage
the past
people
doing
their Wrong verb form
did
homes
chores manually and they Change the noun form
home
stay
healthy and fit because their Wrong verb form
stayed
body
Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
was
always busy. Correct subject-verb agreement
were
Therefore
, the ration
of diseases at that time Correct your spelling
ratio
very
less as compared to the modern era. Add a missing verb
was very
Furthermore
, in past
Correct article usage
the past
people
love to doing
work manually and they promote that culture to Wrong verb form
do
their
next generation. Change the word
the
For instance
, a few years ago people
encourage
their children to do work manually and Wrong verb form
encouraged
give
them a reward to Wrong verb form
gave
motivating
them Wrong verb form
motivate
for
Change preposition
to
doing works
physically.
Wrong verb form
do work
To conclude
, the use of machines for daily routine work is good in terms of saving
and utilities. Fix the agreement mistake
savings
However
, it can be harmful to humans in long
Correct article usage
the long
terms
and Fix the agreement mistake
term
people
lost
their health gradually if they Wrong verb form
lose
will
not do any kind of physical activity.Verb problem
do
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