Many jobs used to be done at home by hand, but nowadays an increasing number of them are done using machines instead. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this development.

A decade ago,
people
were
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preferred to
doing
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do
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their
task
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at home by
hands
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hand
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and they
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using
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inventions.
Whereas
, in the present era,
individual
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individuals
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love
for
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handling machines
for
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in
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their daily routine
works
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work
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. It has lots of advantages but we cannot neglect the downsides of
usage
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the usage
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of
technologies
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technology
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. On the one hand, there are a plethora of advantages of using machines which can save a lot of occasions and perform better than humans.
For
example
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washing clothes manually
consume
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too much, water and detergent.
Therefore
,
people
use a washing machine
for
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wash
bucket
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buckets
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of clothes at one time and save their water and detergent
also
.
Moreover
,
people
use
a
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kitchen
appliance
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appliances
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like
blender
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blenders
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, microwaves and
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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for cooking food and
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it for a long time.
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks
of
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using technologies which can affect our health and fitness. In
past
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the past
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people
doing
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did
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their
homes
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chores manually and they
stay
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healthy and fit because their
body
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bodies
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was
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were
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always busy.
Therefore
, the
ration
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ratio
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of diseases at that time
very
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less as compared to the modern era.
Furthermore
, in
past
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the past
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people
love to
doing
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do
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work manually and they promote that culture to
their
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next generation.
For instance
, a few years ago
people
encourage
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their children to do work manually and
give
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them a reward to
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them
for
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doing works
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do work
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physically.
To conclude
, the use of machines for daily routine work is good in terms of
saving
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savings
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and utilities.
However
, it can be harmful to humans in
long
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the long
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terms
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term
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and
people
lost
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lose
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their health gradually if they
will
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not do any kind of physical activity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • automation
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • manual labor
  • hazardous jobs
  • initial investment
  • production costs
  • job displacement
  • skills gap
  • technical skills
  • reliance
  • vulnerabilities
  • breakdowns
  • cyber attacks
  • craftsmanship
  • artisanal skills
  • cultural heritage
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